Mmmmmm, love the details you added and the richer story you developed. DELICIOUS.
These lines are particularly fabulous:
This night is simultaneously holy and profane.
Planets spin because they are born spinning—hunks of matter spit forth from the mouth of the cosmos, forced into step with a sun.
Oh yes, I love this. So much goodness. I also love the dirty talk from Lee when Kara asks for a preview. Lee Adama can talk nerdy-dirty to me anytime he wants, oh yes.
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Date: 2012-02-02 03:55 am (UTC)These lines are particularly fabulous:
This night is simultaneously holy and profane.
Planets spin because they are born spinning—hunks of matter spit forth from the mouth of the cosmos, forced into step with a sun.
Oh yes, I love this. So much goodness. I also love the dirty talk from Lee when Kara asks for a preview. Lee Adama can talk nerdy-dirty to me anytime he wants, oh yes.
Congrats on finishing!!
<3