You did a BRILLIANT job. I think the story is much better anchored now for readers, and I'd say that the sparring/scar scene stands on its own as a good ficlet.
I'd love to read a separate story about WallflowerLee. Ooh, what if he is adorably brilliant and dorky and tries to use words like "sepulchre" to impress girls? The places my mind goes...
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Date: 2012-01-08 06:09 am (UTC)I'd love to read a separate story about WallflowerLee. Ooh, what if he is adorably brilliant and dorky and tries to use words like "sepulchre" to impress girls? The places my mind goes...
This is such a lovely thing we have going. <3 <3